If you would like to catch your reader off guard with a sumptuous portrayal of an event, try explaining sense perceptions in terms of another sense. That is, describe sights in terms of sounds, smells in terms of vision, touch in terms of taste.
Here is an example from C.S. Lewis:
But of course this didn’t prevent Edmund from seeing. Only five minutes later he noticed a dozen crocuses growing round the foot of an old tree — gold and purple and white. Then came a sound even more delicious than the sound of the water. (The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe, page 132)
Now, everyone knows that sounds aren’t delicious. Or are they? What Lewis has just done is create an alternate sensual universe for his readers to romp around in.
Let’s try this out:
- The lake looked like a whisper.
- She pulled a sunset out of the oven.
- His voice sounded like sweet tea on a summer afternoon.
Can you think of other examples?



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November 18, 2008 at 10:54 am
Lacy
I am a dork who loves writing, so, here it goes:
Her laughter fell like raindrops.
Over the phone, I heard a voice as smooth as silk.
The sunrise whispered its arrival as it climbed over the ridge.
The sumptous bread tickled my tongue with its flavors.
At the mere sound of his voice her heart froze over.
He chilled her heart with his icy glance, and she found herself shivering.
He jumped off the dock into the the waiting arms of the water below.
November 18, 2008 at 3:37 pm
Mom
It was like drinking liquid satin!
November 19, 2008 at 6:11 am
Dave Bish
Eye-candy.
Really helpful post, makes such a difference when we can smell and touch the words.